Creating a Character

Nell is a very large woman with boxy shoulders and large hips. She’s not unattractive; her auburn hair is thick and silky, but usually dangles in one long braid down her back. She wears jackets with fringed sleeves, blue jeans, and beautiful leather boots. And yes, a pair of fancy silver spurs, a large hat, and a loosely tied bandana around her neck.

Nell’s hands are calloused from ranch work. She mends fences, stacks hay and straw bales in the barn loft, and mucks twenty stalls each day. Her nails are long and painted a ruby red, her favorite color.  She is able to protect her perfectly tapered nails from breaking by wearing gloves while chores are done.

Green eyes flash as she talks, and every once in awhile, she will light up a Marlboro… but not too often. She prides herself in eating right – never any sweets and never any soda pop. Occasionally, she will drink a beer or down a shot of whiskey, but everything in moderation. Nell plans to be around for a long time. Why, her dear mother and father both lived to be one hundred!

Nell is tanned a deep brown by long hours spent in the warm Kansas sun. Right now, she is sitting in the trailer of a young rodeo rider, and if we listen closely to the conversation, we realize the rider is her youngest daughter Lizzie. We learn that Lizzie raises quarter horses and often sells them as cutting horses and even show horses. She’s sad right now because Nell is sharing news –  she’s going to ask Lizzie’s father for a divorce. The shock on Lizzie’s face tells us that this news is totally unexpected. “Why?” Lizzie asks.

“Ask your father. ” Nell replies.

 

Thanks to the twowritingteachers blog team and this writing community for providing us with an opportunity to share our writing with educators across the country. The Slice of Life March challenge to write and post every day always inspires me to take some risks. I learn so much. Thank you!

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9 thoughts on “Creating a Character

  1. Totally taken in… sounds like he did something wrong! I like her – minus the Marlboro. If I was her friend I would tell her she is wasting her time taking pride in a healthy diet if she lights up!! But it does make her more complicated… do we get to find out what happens?
    Clare

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    • I am thinking of writing the entire short story, just for fun. Maybe I’ll get Lizzie to talk her mom into letting go of the occasional “smoke.” But it will add to a colorful bar scene later on. Love to you!

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  2. Lynn! Great to read your slices again this year! Great job setting up the scene and describing your characters with precise details. I can picture her ruby red nails, the long braid down her back, and her carefree attitude. Yes! Write the rest as a short story!

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  3. Lynne, I love the way you bring Nell to life. I can picture her trying to be healthy, limiting her Marlboros. The last line leaves me wanting more. I agree with Clare. I want a story.

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  4. OK< Lynne, I want more. When can we expect the book. Great description. As a classroom experiment I would sometimes have my students sit, close their eyes, and imagine someone walking into the classroom. I then had them open their eyes and write a detailed description of who came in. Got some pretty amazing character profiles.

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